First World War book

So I've started a new graphic novel. The working title is "We are the Dead: Canadians and the First World War". As the title suggests it's a graphic history of Canada's involvement in World War One. I'm trying my hand at writing and illustrating this time and thought I would post the first two pages of the book. They depict (partially) the events of June 28, 1914 when the Austrian Archduke, Franz Ferdinand was assassinated by Gavrilo Princip, a Serbian nationalist. This event triggered the First World War. The story then moves on to a brief  overview of events that led up to the assassination and why it is important to the history of the War. After that the focus shifts to Canada and what the country was like in 1914 and how it managed to assemble an Army that would have a profound impact on the battlefields of  Europe. 

66,976 Canadians died in the First World War, out of a population of about 7,000,000. That is a ratio of almost 1 in 10, not including those who died after the fact, or the wounded, or the emotionally scarred, or the families that were devastated by the loss of a loved one. These numbers put the total in the hundreds of thousands. This was the most devastating War in my country's history

Hopefully I  can convey our story in this book.

 Anyways, here's pages one and two . And remember this is my first attempt at writing, so be kind ;)